Nurse
first, poet,
writer after retirement.
Fast
car, blind
curve took all.
66
years but
loves sexy undies.
His
sneer tells
all, leave now.
Left
behind, her
too little self.
Decades
married, she
loves him newly.
Dogs,
they're all
he relates to.
These were indeed inspired by Karin at ManicDDaily who was herself inspired by Luke at Word Salad: The Poetry of Luke Prater who has a great article on micro-fiction six-word stories. I was familiar with the six-word memoir project and wrote one a couple of years ago: Life, my ancestor-in-training course. Luke put his in the above format to be more like poems. It's fun, try it out.
Gotta love this poem. I've heard that some women have the best sex of their lives in the 60's.
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Deletesmiles...luke is great peeps...and used to be on staff....def let him know you did this too...i am sure he would appreciate....i like the differing moods of each...the turn taking all...that hurt...but then i smiled at...
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years but
loves sexy undies.
really nicely done...
Yes, I discovered him through Karin but will be back and I'll let him know
Deletehaha some funs stories indeed. Poor dog getting compared to him and undies too, look at you.
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed and thanks for stopping by.
DeleteCreative and fun verses.
ReplyDeleteThey took a while but I liked it as I got into it.
DeleteI had seen Karin's also! You wrote some nice ones. I like the one about 66. And I say, "Good for her." Smiles. And for 'Decades married,' I say also good for her...
ReplyDeleteWho said we can't enjoy our 60's?
DeleteLike haiku - the brief form here captures character in a flash! And without the restriction of nature reference and the cutting change. I loved them all. Very deft work indeed! Thanks for the comments on my blog.
ReplyDeleteYour one of my teachers in this blog world.
DeleteEach is a complete story!
ReplyDeleteRemarkable.
That's what I was going for, thanks, Rosaria.
DeleteThese are very fun. Great job. It is nice to have them broken up as poems as the enjambment/line breaks I think give a kind of rhythm, or sense of surprise.
ReplyDeleteI have been quite busy, and will be for a bit, so they are a fun thing to think about. I am not sure that a ten and under challenge might not be as good! Certainly a bit easier. You did a really great job though. I especially like the last three. Thanks. k.
Thanks, K. They're trickier than it seems at first but I found Luke's info helpful.
DeleteI've joined a Facebook meme of six word stories. I agree it's tricky. It's a great way to whittle down to the essence, isn't it? I especially like:
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behind, her
too little self.
In light of our current conversation at washed stones, this leapt out. :)
Seeking the essence is a worthy pursuit. I'm sitting in my living room in the sun with a cup of tea and reading this. It tickles me somehow that we're having conversation across these miles. Thanks.
DeleteLove all your 6 word stories. I'm a bit intimidated by them and have yet to try any. Perhaps Luke will do an article on FormForAll regarding them. Happy Birthday to your daughter. You gave us a lovely mom's portrait of her. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Great idea to have Luke do an article. I found his info. helpful.
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