30 January 2014

140 Characters to Leave Your Lover


How many characters
do I need to say
good bye?
There aren't enough

in any language,
any number of words.
You're there begging me
stay.

In response to Mama Zen's Words Count over at Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads who challenged us to write a poem in Twitter's 140 characters. It's not easy.
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24 comments:

  1. De Jackson30 January, 2014 04:16

    You had me at the title! :)

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    1. Grandmother Mary31 January, 2014 22:56

      As a woman of a certain age it's hard to think of leaving your lover without the echoes of Paul Simon.

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  2. Terra 30 January, 2014 05:30

    Good challenge.

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  3. Helen30 January, 2014 06:26

    (there are however fifty ways to leave a lover) Very nice, Mary.

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    1. Grandmother Mary31 January, 2014 23:01

      Thanks, Helen. It's all changed in this digital age.

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  4. Vandana Sharma30 January, 2014 07:02

    But you said it!

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  5. Tessa~ Here there be musing30 January, 2014 13:39

    Gracious, I might learn to try poetry, if I visit here! :-) Really not something, which I ever imagined, for myself.

    Guess I have a very old idea, of what poetry is.........

    Tessa~
    (Upper NYS in US)

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  6. Kerry O'Connor30 January, 2014 16:13

    Your opening line just resonates with me.. I'm not one for goodbyes, and your right - not enough words when the heart is so heavy.

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  7. Maude Lynn30 January, 2014 17:16

    This is so clever!

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    1. Grandmother Mary31 January, 2014 23:06

      I enjoyed this challenge, MZ. My first twitter poem.

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  8. Ella31 January, 2014 17:29

    This does have a heavy draped feeling-very well done!

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  9. Nancy/BLissed-Out Grandma31 January, 2014 20:29

    Something tells me you are saying goodbye a lot these days. I like this form, perhaps even better than haiku.

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    1. Grandmother Mary31 January, 2014 23:14

      True, with a lot more to come. This is less restrictive than haiku.

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  10. Margaret01 February, 2014 02:06

    Just perfect! And you know goodbyes are probably best done short and sweet. Sigh.

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  11. Brian Miller01 February, 2014 03:33

    good bye is one of th hardest things...
    i thought of trying to leave the grands
    and them wanting you to stay
    and how hard that def would be.

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    1. Grandmother Mary02 February, 2014 13:21

      Yes, last time they just grabbed me up in a big, fierce hug and didn't want to let go. Neither did I.

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  12. Sally Wessely02 February, 2014 05:49

    Not easy at all. You did it. I think poets have the easiest time with this challenge. I can never be that succinct.

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