Watch out for the fishes!
They swim where they want, act bold
and eat what they wishes.
Don't think you can out swim 'em
with your floaties and fins green like mold
'cause nothing moves as fast as them.
They look colorful but don't be fools,
no matter what you think or've been told,
they've sharp teeth and swim in schools.
So learn this well my little sweeties
and keep your distance too far to hold
or they'll nibble on your toes and feeties.
Offered for Margaret's challenge to write a children's poem using the amazing kids' art pictures she posted on Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads. Check out the art, you'll be surprised and delighted. Also offered for Gay at dVerse Poets Pub who challenged us to devise a new poetry form. This one is simple - verses of three lines each with the first and third rhyming with each other and the second rhyming across all verses. Does this exist already, Gay? Others came up with fun and creative forms worth perusing.
"they've sharp teeth and swim in schools"...this line is a winner...such a beautiful poem with sweeties and feeties...aww...love the lines :)
ReplyDeleteThis was a fun prompt and the kids' art- astounding.
DeletePretty fun poem! :D
ReplyDeleteI had a good time with it.
DeleteI love that picture! And the poem is definitely a winner. :-)
ReplyDeleteIsn't it amazing? Check out the others as well. You'll be glad you did.
DeleteI adore it!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad since I had fun writing it.
DeleteI like this poem better, than the other one I read.... Also in this prompt.
ReplyDeleteThanks Tessa.
Deleteha, when we used to live at the beach there were fish that would swim around your legs eating the dead skin off...little nibbles it used to tickle...though there are fish you def have to watch out for...smiles
ReplyDeleteSeeing the drawing of fish with big teeth inspired this.
DeleteThis is a very fun poem. I think your form is excellently suited for poems for children.
ReplyDeleteThanks for swinging by, Q.
DeleteThis is a delightful response to the prompt for children's poetry - the tone and mood is spot on.
ReplyDeleteWe get to learn and write some enjoyable things at the pond!
DeleteI agree, so delightful to read specially the last stanza ~ And I also enjoyed the form ~ Happy weekend ~
ReplyDeleteThis was a good way to kick off a happy weekend.
DeleteMr. Linky went a little crazy … check back in a few and see if your poem is linked.. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteIt addresses children's fears in a fun way - and even though it is a bit scary, it has enough fun and melodic meter to balance it. My children actually prefer the old Brother's Grimm tales … go figure.
ReplyDeleteYes, the old tales didn't skimp on scary. Thanks for this wonderful prompt and fabulous art.
DeleteI too wrote my poem based on this picture. Nice to see our different approaches.
ReplyDeleteYours is funny and mine is scary- wonder what that says?
DeleteSorry I'm late to read - last couple of days held unexpected events away from the internet/computer. I liked this as a kids poem and as a form! I have seen some weaves - most more complicated than this. It would be fun to write in anapests or iambs and anapests. The weaving lines make it very effective. Kudos!
ReplyDeleteI'm actually kind of excited that this simple form hasn't been invented. I'll give it a try with the iambs and anapests- that could make it even better. What should I call it?
DeleteThis made me smile so much!!!!! Love that they "eat what they wishes" and the warning about the nibbling of toes! Adorable.
ReplyDeleteWhen my niece was little she called her feet feeties so I worked it in- fun.
DeleteHa, that was always my fear....that the little fish would bite my toes. Smiles. Nice form for dVerse, Mary.
ReplyDeleteThey just might- watch out!
DeleteSo funny verses! Love them :)
ReplyDeleteWriting for kids is a kick.
DeleteBig smiles. I love children's poetry. I guess because I grew up on it. I can still hear my grandmother reading it to me and my mom, who is 93 with dementia, can still recite it from memory. Makes me want to write one...or more.
ReplyDeleteI like thinking I'll still be reciting favorite poems at 93.
DeleteI enjoyed the form, Mary, and also the tone of your sweet poem.
ReplyDeleteSweet with an edge!
DeleteA very happy poem :-)
ReplyDeleteUnless you get nibbled.
DeleteWell done! That first stanza is just adorable.
ReplyDeleteThanks, MZ. These daily prompts are great.
DeleteLove this...Made me smile!
ReplyDeleteMe too!
Deleteit took me to the last stanza to see the middle (threaded) rhyme. it worked quite well. the piece in general was very cute as was the drawing.
ReplyDeleteThe art by the kids was just amazing.
DeleteOh those little creature beneath that could nibble my toes.. I do recall my fear for them.
ReplyDeleteI was hoping readers would remember.
Deleteno swimming in the lake I assume... LOL
ReplyDeleteExactly!
DeleteLaughing out loud. :)
ReplyDeleteAt all those little toes getting nibbled? Wicked!
Deletesmiles :) ~
ReplyDeleteI'm glad. It was meant to be funny!
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