08 January 2013

Rain and Monsters


Dripping from the roof edge
the rain sounds like crystals falling
and when it's harder it's ice cubes pounding
like the drum in garage band.
Rain smells like water with one tiny touch of earth,
it makes the dog downstairs howl.
In one storm we had at home, the rain poured, thunder came
and the wind blew our orange tree down.
I like how it sounds on the metal roof when I'm in my bed.
Today, the wind blows cold, the clouds get dark
and in the west, where rain comes from, a rainbow appears.

My Granddaughter, age 6 1/2, wrote this and dictated it to me when it rained this morning.


My Grandson, age 10, wanted to do a poem about monsters. I tell him about the lune poem and we do a variation since it's easier for him to think in terms of words per line rather than syllables. He likes the result:
Weird Beasts

Awful ogres, trolls,
sphinxes, boggarts, goblins, dragons, chimeras -
weird, wonderful beasts.





12 comments:

  1. What fun you and they are having with poetry!! You are sharing such important things with them.

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    1. I like that my grandson was able to tell me he didn't want to write about the rain.

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  2. how wonderful!! i love that he wrote and i love what he wrote and i love that you helped and encouraged him...woohoo...way to go..

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    1. He's very into monsters of all varieties just now!

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  3. These are both so wonderful! I'm blown away by hers, actually. Augie has been reciting rhyming couplets that he makes up on the spot and then remembers for a long time. I need to write them down, or record him. ViMae is more into the short story, but I must tell her that poetry doesn't have to rhyme! Thanks for this lovely post.

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    1. Writing Augie's down sounds like a good idea, especially since he remembers them. I read a couple of poems that didn't rhyme and the grands got the idea quickly. My grandson liked the shorter form

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  4. Wonderful poems! I tried to comment earlier today but it wouldn't let me. I hope this one goes through. Ice cubes? Brilliant! :-)

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    1. I know! I liked the line about the west where the rain comes from.

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  5. haha i am glad i did not miss this one...the monsters one made me smile...and i love her observations on the rain as well...yes that is the smell...smiles...

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    1. It just came out so directly and he was insistent as well.

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  6. this all renews me, this connection, this seeing and interpreting together)))

    xo
    erin

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    1. I feel happy reading this- that we can do this for each oother.

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