11 January 2013

It's a Timeless Story


It's a timeless story
but so completely personal
that it feels like
mine alone, involves me
with these grands in a love affair
that's new even as they age,
each age better than the one before,
we play board games now and cards,
discuss, dance wildly, write, and when we write
it's a timeless story.


This is a Friday 55 in response to the prompt from Fireblossom at Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads to write a poem with the first and last line the same but with a different meaning. It's not as easy as it sounds.

42 comments:

  1. Oh this gave me chills:

    involves me
    with these grands in a love affair
    that's new even as they age..

    I love everything about this poem: it seems simple enough, but every word carries its own weight and the way it captures your relationship with the children is undeniable. The last lines falls with perfect timing on the heart.

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    1. I appreciate your generous comments. Thanks, Kerry.

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  2. it is really cool how those relationships change with each age...deepen, and just change...hard to describe it but the same could be said of me and my sons....it makes me smile how involved you are with them and the value you give relationship...that is so important...

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    1. I also think it's important- and fun!

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  3. It IS a timeless story.
    Re-Told so expertly by you My Friend.
    Loved your Dual Prompt 55
    Thanks for playing, thanks for your great support, and please have a Kick Ass Week-End....G

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    1. You too G-Man. I like this 55 community!

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  4. I agree you showed the changes that come with time!
    Wow, I love too the value of your words or the weight.
    We grow and continue to grow on our path...
    well done...
    Love the photo..they are adorable! :D

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    1. I love each stage until the next one comes. These middle years are great.

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  5. well, i just love this one from beginning to end!

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  6. I loved this, too. Timeless indeed.

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    1. Yes, I think we share this, Nancy.

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  7. Timeless and yes, children are forever changing... so sweet

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    1. They are and I like the stages. They are sweet kids.

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  8. What beautiful children! And a beautiful poem as well. The challenge was indeed harder than I first thought! You photo (which I assume is in Italy) looks so much like near where my daughter lives in Napa Valley, California. Guess that is why they grow grapes both places!

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    1. The photo is from our balcony in Italy and is a big wine and olive growing area. Thanks for stopping by.

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  9. It may not be easy, but you have done it, and done it well. Congratulations and thank you for sharing these beautiful people with me! :-)

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    1. Your welcome. I've go grandchildren on my mind and heart these days.

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  10. Yes, I agree it is a timeless story. I feel the same with my grands. Each age is a perfect age for them, and there are new enjoyments. It feels like something so 'new,' but indeed I am sure that the thoughts and experiences are timeless!

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    1. Aren't we lucky? Who knew it would be like this?

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    1. Thanks, MZ. I think it starts with enjoying our kids and then extends to the grands. I'm grateful.

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  12. Lovely, and very evocative, Mary.

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  13. I like the challenge of form poetry. Nice job.

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    1. I do as well and get surprised by what gets sparked by the challenges.

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  14. What a sweet choice of subject. Thanks for being part of FBF!

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    1. I enjoyed it. I'm staying wiht my daughter and the grands just now so the choice was easy.

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  15. Mary, your poem is my poem when it comes to grandchildren ... Mine are older at 16 and 19 ~ I've been taught by a four year old how to swim underwater with goggles, by a nine year old how to mount a horse properly ... and oooooohhhh so much more. I've also explored more of your blog this evening .. you write beautifully.

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    1. Thanks, Helen, and I'm glad you stopped by. Aren't they dear when try to teach us.

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  16. I love this. I really enjoyed how it turned around and reached the first line in different meaning. Well done.

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    1. It was tricky but I liked the challenge.

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    1. That's how I feel about my time with them.

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  18. They are so cute, and this really is a timeless story. Very very lovely. k.

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    1. Timeless but personal- unites us all.

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  19. wonderful to have such a good relationship with your grand kids...and how it changes and grows..lovely pic as well..

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    1. I've wanted a good relationship with them and have done what is necessary to grow it.

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