11 April 2014

The Girl



the girl with petals in her hair
died smelling sweet but in despair

the girl had lightening in her eyes
and thunder struck her lovers' cries

the girl whose name is sugar and spice
drips honey for lovers then kills them thrice

the girl who added moon to sky
loved thirteen times before she died

the stout-stemmed girl refused to shout
but thrashed about and threw other girls out

Today, Hedgewitch, over at Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads posted some intriguing pictures by the French artist, Odilon Redon and gave us an ekphrasis challenge. I chose the mysterious Head on a Stem, a 'noir' by Odilon Redon. The form was inspired by Shay, AKA Fireblossom, who did a poem awhile back that was a series of 2 liners using 'the girl' to start each couplet- I loved it and use it here with all credit to her.

18 comments:

  1. I'm so tickled that you liked my idea so much! I can just picture this girl of yours. I especially love the first couplet.

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    1. Then again, when it comes to your poetry what's not to like?

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  2. Wow....this is great. Love that first couplet too

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  3. love the poe like flavor all through....a grand translation of the image...

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  4. Well, it's a little dark but very appropriate to the picture. You are becoming a very talented poetess, Mary. I'm enjoying them. :-)

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    1. Thanks, DJan- or should I call you world record holder? I think that's so cool!

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  5. Ohmy, you people are so talented! To be able to take a prompt, and let your imagination fly, with it. :-)

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    1. I've learned a lot from these talented poets and I'm having a good time. How wonderful to be learning new things at my age!

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  6. I really wanted to stand and applaud at the end of your poem. Fantastic!

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    1. What a nice thing to say- thanks, Kerry.

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  7. Great job with the prompt! Both the beginning and ending are just perfect. I find myself moving in unison to the lines.

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  8. You SO captured the sinister beauty in this image. I honestly cannot pick a favorite couplet out - I went back and read it three times and tried!

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    1. Thanks, Margaret, I found the image strangely sinister as well.

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