12 April 2014

Watch Out for the Fishes!



Watch out for the fishes!
They swim where they want, act bold
and eat what they wishes.

Don't think you can out swim 'em
with your floaties and fins green like mold
'cause nothing moves as fast as them.

They look colorful but don't be fools,
no matter what you think or've been told,
they've sharp teeth and swim in schools.

So learn this well my little sweeties
and keep your distance too far to hold
or they'll nibble on your toes and feeties.



Offered for Margaret's challenge to write a children's poem using the amazing kids' art pictures she posted on Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads. Check out the art, you'll be surprised and delighted. Also offered for Gay at dVerse Poets Pub who challenged us to devise a new poetry form. This one is simple - verses of three lines each with the first and third rhyming with each other and the second rhyming across all verses. Does this exist already, Gay? Others came up with fun and creative forms worth perusing.

52 comments:

  1. "they've sharp teeth and swim in schools"...this line is a winner...such a beautiful poem with sweeties and feeties...aww...love the lines :)

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    1. This was a fun prompt and the kids' art- astounding.

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  2. I love that picture! And the poem is definitely a winner. :-)

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    1. Isn't it amazing? Check out the others as well. You'll be glad you did.

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  3. I like this poem better, than the other one I read.... Also in this prompt.

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  4. ha, when we used to live at the beach there were fish that would swim around your legs eating the dead skin off...little nibbles it used to tickle...though there are fish you def have to watch out for...smiles

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    1. Seeing the drawing of fish with big teeth inspired this.

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  5. This is a very fun poem. I think your form is excellently suited for poems for children.

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  6. This is a delightful response to the prompt for children's poetry - the tone and mood is spot on.

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    1. We get to learn and write some enjoyable things at the pond!

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  7. I agree, so delightful to read specially the last stanza ~ And I also enjoyed the form ~ Happy weekend ~

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    1. This was a good way to kick off a happy weekend.

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  8. Mr. Linky went a little crazy … check back in a few and see if your poem is linked.. Thanks.

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  9. It addresses children's fears in a fun way - and even though it is a bit scary, it has enough fun and melodic meter to balance it. My children actually prefer the old Brother's Grimm tales … go figure.

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    1. Yes, the old tales didn't skimp on scary. Thanks for this wonderful prompt and fabulous art.

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  10. I too wrote my poem based on this picture. Nice to see our different approaches.

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    1. Yours is funny and mine is scary- wonder what that says?

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  11. Sorry I'm late to read - last couple of days held unexpected events away from the internet/computer. I liked this as a kids poem and as a form! I have seen some weaves - most more complicated than this. It would be fun to write in anapests or iambs and anapests. The weaving lines make it very effective. Kudos!

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    1. I'm actually kind of excited that this simple form hasn't been invented. I'll give it a try with the iambs and anapests- that could make it even better. What should I call it?

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  12. This made me smile so much!!!!! Love that they "eat what they wishes" and the warning about the nibbling of toes! Adorable.

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    1. When my niece was little she called her feet feeties so I worked it in- fun.

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  13. Ha, that was always my fear....that the little fish would bite my toes. Smiles. Nice form for dVerse, Mary.

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  14. So funny verses! Love them :)

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  15. Big smiles. I love children's poetry. I guess because I grew up on it. I can still hear my grandmother reading it to me and my mom, who is 93 with dementia, can still recite it from memory. Makes me want to write one...or more.

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    1. I like thinking I'll still be reciting favorite poems at 93.

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  16. I enjoyed the form, Mary, and also the tone of your sweet poem.

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  17. Well done! That first stanza is just adorable.

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    1. Thanks, MZ. These daily prompts are great.

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  18. it took me to the last stanza to see the middle (threaded) rhyme. it worked quite well. the piece in general was very cute as was the drawing.

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  19. Oh those little creature beneath that could nibble my toes.. I do recall my fear for them.

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  20. no swimming in the lake I assume... LOL

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    1. At all those little toes getting nibbled? Wicked!

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